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Enemy

September 1, 2008

situation

I feel a sharp pain in my back. I'm scared to turn around and see whats causing it. The shock will hurt worse than the actual pain itself. Blood is slowly dripping down my back. I can feel it slowly going down and getting cold. A chill goes through my body. The sound of a persons snicker comes to my ear as well as the touch of their hand on my shoulder giving me a slight tap. I stand frozen hopping i dont have to find out whats going on. The pain is sharpening, I twitch and I feel the sharp object go deeper in my back. My legs cave and I fall to the ground. I still will not look up but i cant help myself and as I thought the pain I felt earlier was no comparison to what I feel now that i see what happened. You standing over me with a smile and your hand covered with my blood. I see a reflection in your eyes of a knife deep in my back. That is no longer my concern I ask, "why? how could you?" yet I receieve no answer just the same smile. My heart drops and my head is down. A single tear falls down my cheek onto the floor. In the tear i manageg to catch a glimpse of you walking away. I try ans stand up but i fall right back down. You just continue walking away as if nothing happened. Once more i try and stand the knife still in my back blood still coming out. I stand straight up as much as i can, but the pain still trying to drag me down. All I see now is you far away, your back turned on me. I guess what they say is true "deep cuts the knife". The pain starts to be unbearable but I try and overcome it. So I say one more thing, "So you looking for an enemy? well, you've found an enemy in me" There i fall to the ground on one knee having given up on the future and the ability to trust.

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      Posted 7 months ago by Marter

      i remember this...it was good before and still is

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      I can't and I won't live a lie...no, not this time!
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      Posted 1 year ago by DestinedDreamsDesigns

      Nice writing style, similar to Criss Angel's which is strikingly similar to mine. You should write for a living...

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      Posted 1 year ago by Angel_Eyes_1

      cool storry ;) another one please !

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      sum ppl think dat its so easy wen they dont even no.
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      Posted 1 year ago by sonia

      i love how u write i find it really amazing (i wish i had the talent like dat)

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      KoolKat675
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      if i were you,and you were me, would we still have,this same reality?
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      Posted 1 year ago by KoolKat675

      "sigh"

      you are an amazing writer because it comes from the heart.

      in the end you will conquor your deepest hates

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      Posted 1 year ago by precious23

      you should go to the church

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      Posted 1 year ago by precious23

      oh my god im sorry 'bout your back

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      Posted 1 year ago by angel319

      Hey!! whats goin on??? Always here 2 talk u know.