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Brand New Poem

February 12, 2009

I just kinda started writing and this came out. I revised the hell out of it tho. It started off being about Steamrolled but then changed it to fit any demonstration, Enjoy!

The sun beats, his heart pounds The crowd screams but all he hears are his own breath The ground shakes, his soul is calm The heavens shine as he crawls thru hell Where seeming agony, total numbness The finish line means no more pain…safety All he sees is victory’s looming shadow Inhale. Exhale. Almost there The world bursts to life, he remembers Inhale He slips out of the numbness Exhale Back into the fast paced world Inhale. Exhale. His friends surround him Inhale You are safe now Exhale. Surrender to the pain. “I have transcended”

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      Posted 7 months ago by AmandaG

      Great! I could never come up with something like that

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      That's great! It's better than anything I can write and have written.

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      We yelled "Criss, Criss" as he walked by and he looked up and said "Hey Ladies, Thanks"
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      Posted 9 months ago by lilred64

      Wow. That is really amazing. It reminds me a litlte of Criss's show and the good versus evil idea of it all. The crowd screams but all he hears are his own breath -- that so reminds me of when he first came out on stage when I saw BeLIEve.

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      Posted 9 months ago by Amystika19

      Woow! This is so cool! I just loved it, you should send it to Criss. :D

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      Posted 9 months ago by hummer265

      Oh my gawd---that is awesome, Max Angel! You are very talented. I have always had trouble writing poems that don't rhyme, and you defnitely have the knack for writing them. Good on ya, I love it! Ellen